This is a very incomplete mix of my rough draft audio story for com 210. I still need to work on it a lot but I like the theme of it so far and the content but it is still a little messy. I am wondering what you guys think in terms of the intro I did and if that is something that works for this assignment? Should I have a conclusion? I thought for now and maybe even later no conclusion might work because the final words of the interview kind of sum up the topic pretty well and if I did add anything in it would be something pretty small just wrapping it up. I put together 4 different audio clips together not counting the music and mashed them up and cut out any unnecessary “ummm” like noises and faded them together and changed the volume for any parts that were too quiet with the volume decibel bar. Once I start talking I fade out the music and have it lightly in the background. Do you guys think it’s too quiet or just right? I think there might need to be some transitions as well that I add between the clips maybe explaining the story a little bit more. I just need to try to fit it into 3 minutes which is a problem because I am known to overdo it when it comes to limits (a 5 page paper may end up being 8 pages for me). As for content, I think where I have lived and my family have a huge effect on the person I am and I think focusing on my family’s thoughts of me and the place we have lived for 10 years is a great way to cover the topic of me! I think the music goes great with the topic as it is kind of upbeat but not overwhelming and it pauses it has make it easy to find a stopping place and to fade it out when I am completed. My laptop’s video recorder worked great and when there wasn’t any noise in the background, the sound levels I got in the program were great so I think I will stick to that recording device in the future. As for unnecessary background noise, there is a lot of it in the last half of my draft with my interview with my dad. I think it’s my little siblings but I can’t really tell. Do you guys know of any way to use an effect to reduce background/ambient noise? If not maybe I should just re-record that interview. So far I am happy with how this has turned out but I know I can change a lot to improve it and look forward to the Feedback!
Also thanks to Minor Threat Recordings for listing the background music under the free to share and remix CC license! Here’s the link to where I got the song.
chandlerwysup 
Chandler,
I really like the theme of your audio story, I think it is going to turn out awesome and I really like the music introduction, it makes everything flow better. A couple of suggestions that I personally would help make this even better than what it already is, is that possibly when you start to talk slowly fade the music completely out so it is just your voice so it is not distracting to the listener. Also when conducting the interviews, possibly move the microphone closer to you and the speaker because it sounds like you are almost yelling so the microphone can hear you. Overall you did a great job and I believe you have a fantastic start. Great job.
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Overall, I think that your audio draft is pretty good. I like how you incorporated music in the beginning of the audio video. I also think that your topic is very clear and to the point which is also very good. In order to improve your audio video, I think that you should explain a little bit more about yourself in the introduction. If your topic is about yourself, it might be good to provide a brief overview about yourself. I also think that you should try to include more of a conclusion to tie everything together in the end. Lastly, there are some awkward gaps and noises in the background during your interviews that I think you should cut out of the audio video. Once, again, your overall video is good, I jut think you need to make some minor changes to help improve your video.
Kianna Bertolino
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Hi Chandler, overall your audio story is really good. I liked the fact that you were able to interview your family and use them in your story. One thing I would fix is when you first interview your brother, he says “excelente”, which was cute but it was pretty loud compared to your voice. So I would consider turning the volume down on that little clip. Also when you are interviewing your dad, it sounds like there is a little bit of background noise that I would try to get rid of. I really like the intro music, I think it adds something different to your story. I would also consider adding in a conclusion just about the overall interview. Something about how Pullman is your home and how nice it is that your family is here. Just to wrap it all up. Again, your story is really good and I like the different points of view that you got from your dad and your little brother.
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Self Critique,
I like the theme of my audio story and how it ties into my topic for the semester. I got a lot of great feedback but at the same time I know what to do to improve what I already have. I know that there is some unwanted background noise in part of my interviews so I think I’m going to just redo those interviews. I think the final interview is a nice final piece of content but a conclusion would help summarize the topic as well and then I could fade the music back in and have it fade off after a little while. I’m not sure if I should keep the music going quietly in the background or if I should fade it out completely so I will experiment with that to see what I like more. Overall, I like the song I found and I think it matches the tone of the topic and piece very well, but mostly I want to redo some parts of some of the interviews so I can eliminate background noise and get better volume out of myself and the person I’m interviewing. I got a lot of great feedback about volume changes, ideas for a conclusion, and ideas on what the strengths were such as the topic and questions used. I look forward to finishing the project!
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